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Might be something with the mixing but the strings don't really sound full. Feels like theres some empty space in the song. The actual composition is pretty cool. Reminds me a bit of old JRPGs, although the choir ahhs sound a bit odd. Again, I think that has to do with the mixing and not so much the composition. They just sound flat, or static rather.

Not a fan of the ending, I feel like the song was just getting started. It had a lot of tension going on and it just ended so abruptly. Feels like something even bigger needs to come up after.
It was nice work though.

dudur responds:

thanks,
i ll consider making it longer.
unfortunately i cannot afford a good vst for choirs/drums.i was not able to find a good cheap/free one online :(

Really nice and dreamy. I like your bass, its nice and fat. The intro kind of reminded me of something I'd see in a japanese rpg like Persona or something. Its only a preview so its hard to judge much with the abruptness that it ends at and everything, but this is a really good start. Its nice and chill. Thought it was starting to get repetitive before it ended, but you add a piano to the left speaker so its not a big problem and in this genre repetition works well.

alanisnotcool responds:

Thanks buddy for the valuable feedback =)

Might be a tad hard to critique a remix when I haven't heard the original, but I'll do my best.
I'm not big on the first 2 minutes or so, but I like when the new synth comes in around 2:40. It adds in a new dynamic that the song needed. Reminds me of Avicii a bit. While I'm really enjoying the piano (or piano sounding synth?) parts playing, I feel like the stuff surrounding it could compliment it better. Not that it doesn't fit in here, I just think some more melodic basslines would sound pretty neat.

The track is about what I'd expect from a trance-y tune, so good job there.

I like the bass placement in this song. The guitar sounds kind of funky, but in a good way until the distortion comes in. Sounds a bit too dirty for my tastes.
Not a big fan of the drums, the rhythm on them just feels kind of disjointed which is a shame cause i really enjoy the composing for the other instruments. The high pitched instrument that comes in around the 2 minute mark and does the stereo panning feels a bit random at times though.

I feel like the drums bring the song down an otherwise well composed song. If you re-did the drums I think I'd like the song a good bit better.

Blacklawn responds:

You think they're disjointed? wow, they're the most normal drums I've made :/

I like the intro, even though a tad trite sounding it still builds a nice mood. The intro kind of felt like it dragged on being at about 2 minutes long. I mean it was nice, but it got a tad boring after being on too long.
I'm not really sure how I feel about the vocals. They sound too robotic, monotone, and ehh. They just don't do the song justice in my opinion, so I'd work on that a bit.

I like the guitar bends that I hear coming out of the right speaker. The drums and whatnot seem rather standard.
Overall good effort, but some work could be done.

SourJovis responds:

You can't just throw around words like trite without arguments. What's trite about the piano part? The chord progression is nothing I've heard before. I don't say songs with a similar progression don't exist, but at any rate it's not common. The melody is nothing straightforward either. 2 minutes for a full song can never be too long. Especially not when there isn't any repetition. I think that's just your attention span. Sorry. You say you got this boring because of my song? That's a bold accusation. As far as I can tell from your other reviews and your own songs you've always been boring, so don't blame the song. If you don't like the vocals because they are too robotic I can understand that, but how can you call them monotone? It spans a range of 19 semitones. I can only sing about 4 semitones higher than this without switching to head voice (and I can't do that well), and I had a lot of trouble with the lower 2 notes. I know I'm an untrained singer, but you can't expect much more range from an experienced singer. If you call a compound triple meter with constant drum fills standard, then sure as hell these drums are standard. Oh man…

The intro is abrupt as hell, but I guess for this style of music that can work. The mixing is pretty good from what I can tell in this song, I like your synth sounds. As for the actual writing, it seems a tad generic. Like I've heard this done a ton of times before. Not that that is necessarily a problem, as some people like to make music like that.

I like the quiet section two minutes in and the piano playing. I was a bit disappointed at about 2:40 when everything else came in. I think it would have been really cool to just end it with a piano solo. That was definitely my favorite part of the song.

Everratic responds:

Thankyou for your review! I don't mind generic music at all, I listen to a lot of pop music. About the intro, I hate boring and slow intros, so this is how I like to do it. I ended too many of my recent songs with piano solos imo so I had to do something different this time. But I do love piano endings.

The intro drags on a bit too long, I was losing interest before it really began. When that second guitar came in it does remind me a good bit of Sonic. The mixing doesn't seem to be the best. The guitar sounds too trebly and the drums just don't sit well. The writing itself isn't too bad, i just think the mix brings it down a bit. I'd recommend studying some drum playing too... your drums seem to just be all over the place, not really doing anything to make the song better.

You show some signs of potential though, just keep trying.

Blacklawn responds:

Two stars? Seriously, MockOff? Is this some sort of revenge review for that one I gave you the other day?

I get that it has issues. It's one of my older songs, after all, but I definitely think it's above that. If even Sequenced gave 3 stars to a version with inferior mixing, that probably means something. Mixing is important, sure, and I'm still learning, but I think the composition makes up for that. I admit that the drums are not my best work, though.

Right from the beginning the inspiration is pretty apparent. I'm not really sure how I feel about your instrument choices. Your synths sound a bit too flat, maybe too trebly for my tastes. The low end doesn't feel like its fully there, giving a kind of empty feeling.

I like your drum sounds and piano though. Piano notes were nice and I liked the heavy kick. The outro was a bit too abrupt but I feel like you meant for this to loop so that isn't an issue. Transitions were kind of hit or miss for me.
Song was decent though and could work for a title theme.

Radiationator responds:

Thank you for the review! :)

I will take your advice in and try to improve on it!

I really like the bassline that starts the song off and everything. I'm not sure how I feel about that synth-y thing that kind of sounds like a guitar, the high pitched one. It comes in a bit too abrupt it makes it harsh on the ears. The piano selection was really good, goes well in throughout the song.

Not really a fan of any of the synths you use though, they all sound a bit too cheesy in my opinion, but maybe that was part of the plan. I like the guitar parts when its just the drums and bass with it, it works quite well there, but I think it sounds a bit too cheesy again with everything else. Almost reminds me of Sonic the Hedgehog.

My complainants might just be because of personal preference. Besides those though, it was an enjoyable listen.

Blacklawn responds:

Thanks for reviewing. Oddly, some people actually complained when I took out the synth and left the rest. Can't please everyone, of course.

Never played the game, but I'll review nonetheless. You have a really nice voice, sounds really professional. I haven't heard the original song so I can't compare it to that, but you did really well with your instrument choices I thought.
I can't really complain about anything, this is probably the most professional song I've heard on the site. You did well.

Troisnyx responds:

Thanks -- I do recommend you look up the original; it goes by two titles: "Song of Awakening" and "Ballad of the Wind Fish". It's Gameboy sound, but that's the reference for this piece.

Glad you liked it! ^_^

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